I found that I wasn't too pleased with how the story turned out either. Expect huuuge changes in the plot, though the beginning will still look alot like the 5 chapters that are posted here on LJ. About this awesome new story, the new AIM will still be mostly about James' life on the ACorp station, but at the same time... Well I don't want to spoil anything :)

Also, AIM will be moving to a new website. I just like it better, mostly because of the customization I can do over there :)
New site: http://artificialintelligentmachine.webs.com/

There's not much there at the moment, I will probably add more functions to the site as I see the need for them. Also, I've uploaded the beginning of chapter 1 if anyone is interested :)

 As we have gotten to the 5th chapter, which also introduces the first few threads of the plot, I noticed that I wasn't quite happy with how everything turned out. So I'll be trying to improve the chapters. And when I say improve, I actually mean rewrite, because were talking pretty large changes here. That said, I have no problems with the story, except chapter one, which will change alot (possibly). I'm truly sorry about any inconvenience this might cause, and hopefully it won't take me too long until I can continue with the story.

Possible changes:

Dialogue - The layout could be better, there should only be minor changes here.

Character interaction - Have you wondered how some of the conversations look like? Me too. Noteworthy changes will appear, making the conversations seem a little less blunt.

Environment - Having a hard time picturing the locations in the story? That's because I almost didn't write about it. Expect large changes in this area, so that readers may fully immerse themselves in the story. Yeah the holodrive was pretty disappointing wasn't it?

The largest change however, will not be improving, and is the main reason for the rewrite. The rewritten chapters will have all characters in 3rd person. 1st person worked OK, but I'm pretty sure the change will be for the better, as it allows for better interaction with the environment and descriptions of various objects and characters. If it turns out that 3rd person doesn't work, I'll just change back again. Some feedback on this would be really appreciated.

Lastly, I wish I could expand my vocabulary and my grammar. But that probably won't happen anytime soon. Therefore I again ask for your help in this; if you spot anything wrong, be it poor grammar or even badly worded sentences, please, tell me in a comment so I can fix it!



Regards
-TT